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Proofread thiss? Topic: education dissertation
July 15, 2019 / By Innes
Question: When the names Lorena Bobbit, Clarence Thomas, or Anita Hill are mentioned, what comes to mind? Sexual harassment was likely to be the first thing that popped into your head.(I want to change this sentence and get rid of you!) Sexual harassment can be defined as unwanted sexual advances or actions on the job which causes a person to be offended. Sexual harassing behavior can range from a whistle to offensive jokes to sexual assault, and it has been a major issue in our society for many years. This mostly occurs because men are unaware of exactly what defines sexual harassment. Most people are unaware of sexual harassment in the workplace and in education, the acts about sexual harassment, the consequences, where to find help, and how to stop sexual harassment.. i would really like it if someone could read this over and make it sound better. any changes would help!
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Elea Elea | 10 days ago
Read this..... some other famous sexual harassment cases that might help in your dissertation. http://www.hrworld.com/features/top-20-sexual-harassment-cases-121307/
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Elea Originally Answered: Can someone proofread this?
There are some grammar, word choice and article (a, an, the) issues. Check your email in a few minutes.

Cherise Cherise
Take "or" out of your first sentence. You have three things you're linking and "or" only works on two things. In the second I would suggest changing "was" to "is". You have two sentences in a row that begin with "sexual harassment" --- change one so it's not the same thing every time. Also I suggest changing "causes" to cause. What is your source for saying this problem is because men are unaware? Is this factually backed up somewhere in your essay or is this your opinion? If it's opinion you need to change the tone of this sentence. I think your last sentence is a little long and confusing. Perhaps change to something like, "Most people are unaware of what constitutes this kind of behavior or the consequences of sexual harassment in the workplace or educational environment. More information is needed on where one can find help and how to stop this criminal situation." Hope some of that is helpful.
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Ashlie Ashlie
Definitely take out 'you'. Sexual (should be changed to sexually) harassing behavior can range from a whistle, to offensive jokes to sexual assault, and it has been a major issue in our society for many years. Sexual harassment isn't just on the job though. So you should change: Sexual harassment can be defined as unwanted sexual advances or actions on the job which causes a person to be offended. TO One form of sexual harassment can be defined as unwanted sexual advances or actions on the job which causes a person to be offended. Sexual harassing behavior can range from a whistle to offensive jokes to sexual assault, and it has been a major issue in our society for many years. I don't like the way that sounds. So I think it should be like this: Sexually harassing behavior can range from any number of things including whistling, offensive jokes, to even sexual assault. Unfortunately, sexual harassment has been a major issue in our society for many years. Did you read up on this to be able to say that "This mostly occurs because men are unaware of exactly what defines sexual harassment." Maybe (if you did) then I would start that sentence with: Studies show that this type of behavior occurs because men are unaware of exactly what defines sexual harassment.
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Zia Zia
"Sexual harassing behavior can range..." Change sexual to sexually. It sounds better as an adjective. ^_^ Your last sentence seems a bit...eh...off. Especially when you say, "the acts about sexual harassment". >_> Try rewording it, you should, for Yoda, I am. Stating things backwards, I like. xD There aren't any other significant problems, though. ^_^
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Slade Slade
You can search some more articles about sexual harassment to add more reference to your essay. Also, you can make your essay reviewed by some professional dissertation proofreading services online. Those service are good and worth the money. Also, the prices are very much cheap.
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Slade Originally Answered: Can someone please proofread this for me?
Sentence e. You shouldn't start a sentence with "so" Use "therefore" instead. Same sentence: thoroughly read the material. Otherwise, it's fine. Hope this helps

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