Originally Answered: Is this a good start for a book?
Ok, what I am about to say may seem harsh, but the basis of being a good author is to have well developed writing skills which are usually best developed under constructive criticism.
So some things I noticed in the introduction:
As I ran from him, the man with a brown paper bag on his head, with two holes where his eyes are
This sentence is a fragment, and I'm sure that's exactly what a word processor will tell you. The start of the sentence 'As i ran from him,' does not fit with the rest of the sentence - the sentence starts off by introducing the action, then you describe what the action is caused by, but then you do not return to the action and the sentence does not make sense.
Something more like:
I ran from him, the man with the brown paper bag on his head, two holes where his eyes should be, my breathing was heavy and erratic, and sweat covered every inch of my exhausted body.
Is it necessary to mention the location at this point? Maybe try to work it in differently rather than on it's own.
Instead of 'He had a button-down...' use 'He wore a button-down...'
I'm not sure how one gets crude wrinkles in their clothes, try using a different word.
'...visual remembrance...' remembrance is the wrong word here, try changing this part of the sentence to something like 'Maybe he was my minds' own interpretation of Jason Voorhees...'
Try not to use the classic '...' for a break in the sentence, use a dash instead - looks more professional while having the same effect, it ALMOST ends a sentence but still allows for the same track of thought to carry on without a full stop.
' I knew I was going to be caught by him eventually.' instead try 'I knew he would catch me eventually, but the adrenalin that thundered through my veins pumped my legs, not letting me give in yet.'
In the last bit, where you say that he 'lurked towards you', lurked is the wrong word, it would usually imply that he was being stealthy in some way that you would not be aware of him.
The '...' at the end could, too, be substituted for a dash.
Okay, I'm not going to do that for the rest of the entry but just a few quick things:
Start the paragraph off with the same dash as before, instead of the '...'
Don't use brackets, work the information in the brackets into each sentence, this does not work for a novel, it breaks the readers focus with information that probably is useless anyway.
Do we really need to know that he doesn't take morning showers? Or can you just state that he is taking a shower to calm down and wash the sweat off?
Do we need to know that his eggs are scrambled? Can this be worked into the sentence? 'I turned the kettle on to boil some water for a much needed morning-coffee while my scrambled eggs cooked in the frying pan burning slightly.'
Check for places where a comma needs to be used.
In dialogue where he is talking to himself, try to shorten what he is saying, when ever you have said something to no one in particular do you use a full sentence structure like in this?
Do not use capitals, put the words in italics instead, italics stresses words in a more professional looking manner.
Last things are that you need to extend some of the bits in that chapter 1 part, not enough information is given to the reader and the cursory look that you give is very disjointed. Look at this and see where it can be broken into separate paragraphs, this will greatly improve how it reads by giving the reader a pause to take it all in.
Hope this helps, the story is good so far, keep up the good work!