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I am French, is it correct to write this please?

I am French, is it correct to write this please? Topic: Music for writing action
July 21, 2019 / By Astaroth
Question: Can you correct this please ? "Dear Joe, I came last August to your festival and was pretty surprised to see your actions. I really loved the surroundings, the mix between performances and music. yeah, I had a lot of fun. I am writing you as I am managing a band in Paris called XXX, we are planning to tour in Germany and I really would like them to play in AAA. Do you think it would be possible ? Warning, this is experimental music." thanks a lot
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Abaegayle Abaegayle | 1 day ago
It is alright though this would probably sound better. "Dear Joe, Last August I came to your festival and I was surprised. I really loved the atmosphere and environment and the mix between performances and music. I had a lot of fun. I am writing to you because I am managing a band in Paris called XXX, we are planning to tour in Germany and I would really like the opportunity for them to play in AAA. Do you think this could be possible? I must warn you though, their music is experimental."
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Abaegayle Originally Answered: I am French, is it correct to write this please?
It is alright though this would probably sound better. "Dear Joe, Last August I came to your festival and I was surprised. I really loved the atmosphere and environment and the mix between performances and music. I had a lot of fun. I am writing to you because I am managing a band in Paris called XXX, we are planning to tour in Germany and I would really like the opportunity for them to play in AAA. Do you think this could be possible? I must warn you though, their music is experimental."

Sonnie Sonnie
"Dear Joe, I came to your festival last August and was pretty surprised to see your [actions -- not clear -- what do you mean?]. I really loved the surroundings, the [mix -- not clear] between performances and the music. Yeah, I had a lot of fun. I am writing to you about a band I am managing in Paris called XXX. We are planning to tour in Germany and I really would like them to play in AAA. Do you think this would be possible ? I should warn you, though, their music is experimental." That's very good, just a couple of places where I'm not sure what you mean -- "your actions" and "the mix between performances".
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Osbourne Osbourne
I came to your festival last August and really loved everything, the surroundings, the mix between performances and music. I had a lot of fun. I am writing you as I am managing a band in Paris, called xxx. We are planning to tour in Germany, and I would like them to play in AAA. The band does experimental music. Do you think it would be possible? And can you tell me how we may apply in order to be considered for performing? Thanks a lot.
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Lenny Lenny
Sounds about right to me. Has good flow and easy to understand. Just take off the quote marks at the beginning of your Dear Joe and at the end of the word music. Quotes are always beginning and end of a quote. Since you are showing us your writing the quotes do not make sense. Beginning of a sentence is with a capital letter. So the thanks a lot should be, Thanks a lot.
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Lenny Originally Answered: Need help in French?
Don't worry. My sister used to be good at French in years 7 and 8, but then she started failling in year 9. All of the other students at school, when they went to France for an exchange program, just stayed around their friends and didn't talk French at all. She decided to go to France by herself in year 10 and stayed there for a few weeks, and now her French is better than her friends'. I suggest you join an exchange program that is separate from the school. Move to France for two or three weeks to brush up on your French. If you don't do it with the school, you're less likely to get distracted by your friends. When you finish the program, go back to your school. In the meantime, you should do some revision from some old textbooks. If you can't remember anything, get some beginners' books, or practice reading websites in French.

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