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Here's a couple poems a wrote. do you like them? are they good? good or bad comments i dont care.?

Here's a couple poems a wrote. do you like them? are they good? good or bad comments i dont care.? Topic: How to write a poem with your name
June 16, 2019 / By Denisa
Question: (Poem about abstact painting) Mumbled, Jumbled Mismatch, Dispatch Art will tumble Out of this batch Onto canvas Orange & Green Making an explosive scene Of colored lines Imagination (i call this one What?) Corpulent cows and booger flicking fellows Living in a world that is the opposite of mellow John Hancock changed his last name to footpenis But many historians must have not seen this Big green marine licking lollipops and sewer pipes My Tushy’s sore, rode long distance on a mountain bike Mount Everest exploded; what came out was crème brulee When it comes to the election, who I vote for will be John McCain Even though he’s rather moderate on many of his issues I’m not voting for Hillary, so my vote’s going to this dude God it’s only Tuesday how long until the weekend? Does reading this poem make you think I’ve gone off the deep end? Ate some bad Taco Bell, got a weird feeling in my gut As you read this poem you've got to be thinking... What? last one :) Ode to a Dishwasher Ode to a dishwasher with your pruneyesque fingers, Stuck in the back of the restaurant where the horrid smells linger You scrub, and you spray, and you rinse, and you dry The amount of dishes you do would make a housewife cry. The plate that just shattered is coming out of your check You left some food in that bowl, but oh well, what the heck That Velveeta cheese soup is just so hard to clean It’s mad of yuckety, chunkety, plasticky cheese The sound of the washer is soothing at times If it ever breaks down, you’ll surely lose your mind Oh the poor dishwasher must wash other’s dishes all day And when it comes to washing dishes, he is a protégé And all though he only gets paid six bucks an hour He’ll scrub, spray, and rinse, and then dry with a towel thanks everyone for the feedback. no offense taken to any criticisim
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Callidora Callidora | 4 days ago
I like the first poem alot. With only a few words it brought a scene to my mind of an artist passionately flinging orange and green paint on a large canvas. The poem is creative and imaginitive. To 'paint' that picture so easily is impressive. Many lines of the second poem made me laugh. I usually like an odd sense of randomness and freethought, but overall I thought it was slightly irritating. No offense. The third poem is my favorite. It's a real gem. It is hilarious and also full of pathos, bringing the reader into the dreaded world of the dishwasher. You definately have talent and a great sense of humor. Keep it up!
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Callidora Originally Answered: My Poems. Are They Good?
Your Poems are really good. However be careful putting them on the internet. I really like the one you wrote for your mother.
Callidora Originally Answered: My Poems. Are They Good?
sorry. not the best I've read. but you keep going at it, you're only 13 so you really don't have anything good to write about yet. maybe when you grow up it'll develop into a great talent.

Alyse Alyse
I like the first poem with colors like orange and green mixed I think of fingerpainting. Also with the word imagination I think of being creative fingerpainting I meant painting words like canvas colors imagination This one is artistic.
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Alyse Originally Answered: Is my writing any good? Any comments accepted :)?
Omg I think you have some serious potential! But at the end when u said "My father is dead" u said it twice, and that made it sound more like a poem. I think its amazing, keep writing! (:
Alyse Originally Answered: Is my writing any good? Any comments accepted :)?
Small nitpicks: -Single space your paragraphs. Double space paragraphs for a scene change. -“No, Patrick, can’t you see that Kristen needs someone right now! That should have a question mark, not an exclamation point. Exclamation points should be avoided in general. Now, with that out of the way, yes I think you have potential. I daresay you're a hell of a lot better than any other 13 year old writer on this site. I also recommend that you join the forums at www.youngwriterssociety.com. The writers there are all young, and all very good. They will give you detailed reviews of your work to help you improve.

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